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What tragically is not there,
What hides in a darkened lair,
To the end our prayers d’oth speak,
To rekindle what we’ve leaked,

Hiding in the devils lair,
As if claming what we dare,
Through shadowed moonlight
we do seek,
what drowned horrors we may keep.
©2006-2009 ~beyondinsanity
:iconbeyondinsanity:

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I dont really have much to say about this poem >.> I wrote it in class because we are supose to be writing poetry but I did one already and I'm a lazy butt! ^^ enjoy

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:icondevyn-wolf:
Very majestic sounding. Coolies! :blowkiss:

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"Knowledge speaks, but wisdom listens."
-Jimi Hendrix
:iconbeyondinsanity:
Lol, thanks ^^

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- I took a shortcut through blood just to get to you -
:iconobscureprocure:
It has structure and rhymes =|Even though this is short I really love it. Sure leaked and speak are pushing me for a rhyme and the third line in the second stanza is incredibly extended but that doesnt really matter... The rhythm is a little rough at the end but somehow the flow is not disrupted and I found myself reading on louder and louder (in my head if that makes sense). This is a great piece and maybe something you could add onto (??) deserves a fav.

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When there is Nothing left to burn, You have to Set Yourself on Fire.
:iconkierro:
i agree, you should add onto this! it's a good poem :D

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90% Of This Game Is Half Mental
:iconbeyondinsanity:
I'm not sure if I will but perhaps, thanks for the favorite I really apreciate it ^^ I know at parts it needs a little clean up but I wasnt even going to write a poem in class and just started to . . . it was strange because I hate writing when it is wanted by a teacher, for it usually isnt that great >< but thanks i'm glad that you liked it and I'm glad that you read it louder and louder (in you head :D ) makes me think I struck a cord ^^

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- I took a shortcut through blood just to get to you -
:iconbeyondinsanity:
Lol perhaps I will ^^

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- I took a shortcut through blood just to get to you -
:iconobscureprocure:
(chord)

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When there is Nothing left to burn, You have to Set Yourself on Fire.

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